[GSoC Application Review] Application Review for Wayland Project

[Armin Krezović]

On 21.3.2016 8:57, Pekka Paalanen wrote:
> On Sat, 19 Mar 2016 23:33:21 +0100
> Armin Krezović <armin.krezovic at fet.ba> wrote:
>
>> On 13.03.2016 18:22, Armin Krezović wrote:
>>> Hello Pekka, Quentin and Kat (sorry, don't know the real name yet).
>>>
>>> Pekka and Quentin have volounteered to review my GSoC application
>>> draft for the Wayland project. Pekka also suggested to add Kat to
>>> the list of reviewers.
>>>
>>> As suggested, I've used Google Docs to create a document. You can
>>> access it at:
>>>
>>> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bBgH8h9UiAPkipGjxHePnmcVU73Tef033-xojVWIhCU/
>>>
>>> Embedded below is the text from document, so you can comment on
>>> individual sentences/paragraphs/etc if needed.
>>>
>>> Thank you in advance and looking forward to your reply.
>>>
>>> Armin.
>>>
>>
>> Hi everyone,
>>
>> The proposal has been updated to reflect all the feedback I've
>> received so far. I didn't include the text in the mail this time.
>>
>> Pekka and Quentin should be able to comment on the Google document
>> which is available at the URL referenced above.
>>
>> Please let me know if any other adjustments are needed.
>>
>> Highlights:
>>
>> - Completely rewrite Project Scope paragraph to include more details.
>> - Improve wording in Dedication paragraph so I sound more dedicated :).
>> - Extend Dedication paragraph to include additional information on
>>    how the project will be realized.
>>
>> If all goes well with this one, I plan to submit it on Monday, as
>> said in one of the replies.
>
> Hi Armin,
>

Salut,

> in "dedication" you refer to "the first part of my proposal" but that
> is not too clear, I am left to guess what you mean.
>
> Since this is the first application I have ever looked at, and never
> have applied for GSoC before myself, I think I have now said everything
> I can.
>
>
> Thanks,
> pq
>

Now that you mention it, it looks kinda confusing. How about now? I've 
included 3 tasks in a list so it's more clear which is the first one.

Thanks, Armin

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